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Severus Snape and Lucious Malfoy go to a Night Club in the 1960s i was bored when i wrote this idk if ill continue
The bouncer looked Lucius up and down with a frown, then held his hand about a foot over the boy's head. "Forget it, Blondie. You must be this tall to ride this attraction."
He turned his eyes towards Severus, whose arms were folded over his little chest and whose face bore a scowl that might one day become truly mighty. "And you, you scrawny thing, quit making that face. It's not going to make your age go into the double digits any faster."
The bouncer shook his head. "A bit of advice, boys: next time, at least have gone through puberty before trying to sneak into a club."
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Even the darkest skies have their stars. But what if the stars die; does the darkness just fade away? With the turn of each page,I can feel the stars burning out again as they did so long ago, and I fear,when I reach the last page, I may not have any left
...I'm stumped. Can anyone else deduce what this story is supposed to be about? (Reading it didn't help much.)
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"The boy reminded him of a heptagon. Hyper energy pulled in too many directions."
...what? The only way I know how to compare anyone to a polygon is by calling them "a square". Is this actually a whole class of expressions I wasn't previously aware of? And why is seven the number best representative of "too many"? Wouldn't even more be worse? "The boy reminded him of a tetracontagon." Yeah, I like that.
The bouncer looked Lucius up and down with a frown, then held his hand about a foot over the boy's head. "Forget it, Blondie. You must be this tall to ride this attraction."
He turned his eyes towards Severus, whose arms were folded over his little chest and whose face bore a scowl that might one day become truly mighty. "And you, you scrawny thing, quit making that face. It's not going to make your age go into the double digits any faster."
The bouncer shook his head. "A bit of advice, boys: next time, at least have gone through puberty before trying to sneak into a club."
---
Even the darkest skies have their stars. But what if the stars die; does the darkness just fade away? With the turn of each page,I can feel the stars burning out again as they did so long ago, and I fear,when I reach the last page, I may not have any left
...I'm stumped. Can anyone else deduce what this story is supposed to be about? (Reading it didn't help much.)
---
"The boy reminded him of a heptagon. Hyper energy pulled in too many directions."
...what? The only way I know how to compare anyone to a polygon is by calling them "a square". Is this actually a whole class of expressions I wasn't previously aware of? And why is seven the number best representative of "too many"? Wouldn't even more be worse? "The boy reminded him of a tetracontagon." Yeah, I like that.
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Date: January 11th, 2008 03:16 am (UTC)From:"You must be this tall to ride this attraction."
If the characters weren't so young in the time this story takes place, I'm make a "riding" joke here...
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Date: January 11th, 2008 03:19 am (UTC)From:Yeah, and they kind of acknowledge it: it's "back when snape was young in the 60's". If they had been transporting more adult characters back in time, it could have been done as amusing crack. But no, they just straight-up missed.